2 in 1 day.
Working on Compass Rose and catching up to the point where I am ready to add new content.
First Draft 101.
Setting the Colony manuscript aside, albeit longer than I normally would, served the purpose of allowing me to see/edit with new eyes.
I would have had to do so anyway so this saves me a step in the process.
As I came across a sentence toward the “literal” point where I’d be adding new content I took a moment to consider how even subtle changes are crucial to setting a scene.
In order to put the reader in the same mental place as the character(s).
Based on information provided by various web pages dedicated to the series
And the first book in the series
readers and visitors ascertain all is not well in tera-forming land.
How to illustrate?
Without going into a lesson on writing characters I’ll just give a brief example. It’s the example that caught me up because it jumped out.
Before And After
Note: The character – a Yama agent – is deactivating a personal signal beacon.
Before: He’d deactivated the one on the dead man’s wrist. After closing his eyes.
After: He’d deactivated the one on the dead man’s wrist. After, that is, closing his eyes.
By inserting , that is, I slow the pacing and allow the reader to slip into the space where this character’s emotions are roiling due to a variety of circumstances, not the least of which is finding himself with two kids who, along with thousands, were never meant to survive.
In his care.
It’s typical of hundreds if not thousands of edit choices writers make every day.