For the past several days I’ve been trying to finish a difficult scene in Promotion: Book 11 in the Metatron’s Army Series.
The difficulty comes from the complexity involved.
This book in general has been a challenge since I ended up with two versions of it.
My misguided attempt to better organize the files.
I was at least able to choose which of the versions to use and was making great progress when things started grounding to a halt.
As I had a lot going on at the time I tried stepping away – only to find I couldn’t. I needed to get back to it.
The style of the scene – which is actually several scenes that alternate – is something I’ve never done before but it fits the progression of the story and the series perfectly. Unfortunately, and likely due to the nature of that style – it is incredibly awkward – for me.
When I read back through it it’s fine – seamless – makes sense.
The challenge comes from having to swap between characters going through a similar experience in two different locations.
No, not two different dimensions. Those I can do! Not different timelines either.
One of the alternating scenes was becoming smoother but that made sense since I knew those characters better. Thinking that was the source of the problem – that I didn’t know the other characters as well – I took myself to lunch at a local place so I could work on it.
I went close to when it opens so it would not be crowded, chose a table away from others, ordered a glass of wine and pulled out pen and notebook. By the time my turkey sandwich arrived, I had seven pages written.
It helped but not in the way I intended. Getting away and working on a different angle – character backstory for one of the characters in a different context altogether – enabled me to look at the awkward scene with new, less distracted eyes.
It didn’t solve the awkwardness issue, however.
And I was getting tired of reading from the beginning. My eyes were starting to cross!
As I sat down to again attack the situation I realized why the scene is so awkward! It’s supposed to be! That’s the point of it! The characters themselves are feeling awkward!
Ironically, this tells me I did a good job with the situation because I was feeling that awkwardness!
The style was fine – transitioning between the parallel situations – it was the one alternating scene – the characters in it – that was the issue.
I’m about to get back to it but with fresh eyes.
Eyes of writer and reader both!
** Decided to take a detour through a music break – Motley Crue – Dr. Feelgood and Shout at the Devil. Just the thing to get the brain cells workin…